Exodus Of The Machine Teaser 1

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies critically low.  And an AI core on the loose that must be destroyed before it escapes."

Or recaptured.  But yea, pretty close now

Now how to apply textual compaction.  Which is as uncomfortable as it sounds.

[x4000]

"Stranded.  Supplies critically low.  And an escaped AI core that must be hunted."

"Stranded.  Supplies critically low.  And an escaped AI core that must be destroyed."

[Underfot]

"Your team is untested, your circumstance impossible.  Your enemy is unknowable, but no longer invincible."

[Hearteater]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Hunt.  Kill.  Or It Will Destroy Us All."

[x4000]

"Stranded.  Supplies critical.  Hunt the AI Core or it will destroy us all."

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies critical.  Hunt the AI that could destroy us all."

[Hearteater]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Hunt it, before it hunts you."

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Hunt the harbinger of our destruction."

[x4000]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Hunt the harbinger of our destruction."

Nice!  And that makes it more clear what time period we're talking about, too.  This is my favorite now.

[Hearteater]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  The Harbinger Draws Near."

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  The Harbinger Draws Near."

Well, more it draws away.  You're chasing the thing the whole game.

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Hunt humanity's most dangerous creation, before it escapes."

Not the strongest, I know, just trying to see if something closer to accurate also leads to something stronger.

[x4000]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  A desperate chase after humanity's most dangerous creation."

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Chase humanity's most dangerous creation."

[keith.lamothe]

"Stranded.  Supplies Critical.  Chasing humanity's most dangerous creation."

[keith.lamothe]

Btw I'm going to be rewriting the opening dialogue a lot now.  This mood totally changes things   But it's much more appropriate.