Oh, a few rough chat style comments from a friend.
don't like this bit: "It brings together an old-school platformer/shooter and a robust turn-based strategy game." makes it sound as if they're referring to
a particular platform/shooter and a particular strategy game
maybe something like "across multiple genres, seamlessly bringing together the best qualities of old-school platform-shooters and turn-based strategy games."
Oh, and they need to swap these around or something "Vastly Improved Visuals:
Fully redone artwork by Heavy Cat Studios, including 125 all-new monsters, 200 spells, and lots more.
More Tactile Combat:
The physics of movement and attacks have also been completely redone from the first title,"
so the 1st one mentions it's an improvement on the 1st game
right now it says the visuals are an improvement, but it doesn't say over what
Just swap the visuals and combat statements so the combat one comes first, that way you've primed the reader to understand you're referring to the 1st game, not even any need to write anything new
